Songs of my own

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Started 4 years ago by metalrulesall
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im writing some songs of my own and i want to know what all of you think of them here's one to get you started....its called like a serpanteen

Verse 1) Ask me no question's And i'll tell you no lie's You wanna hold on tight boy's Better run for your life She steal's the spotlight She only play's to win Rapped around your finger Like a second skin

(Chorus) She's lust not love She's begging next to you She's evil living down on her knee's A women not a girl Say's it take 2 She's crazy like a serptanteen

(Verse 2) Want her cold blood thirsty Sleep's a bed of gold She'll snap her finger's 1 2 3 She'll burn you 3rd degree She's my angel with out wing's She gave herself to me Baby girl your such a tease I think you've said enough

(Pre-Chorus) I got to have you give it all to me Girl got to give it all

(Chorus) She's lust not love She's begging next to you She's evil living down on her knee's A women not a girl Says it take's 2 She's crazy like a serpanteen

" into the flood again same old trip it was back then "

Posted 4 years ago #
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It would be better if you recorded tracks to go with the lyrics and posted them on myspace for everyone to listen to or posted them to youtube.
It's hard to judge a song without the tune.

"I even had a little mini skirt and waistcoat made for Wig Wam Bam. The skirt was so short, my undercart hung beneath the hem. I thought it best to keep my underwear on"-Steve Priest

Posted 4 years ago #
metalrulesall
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good point

" into the flood again same old trip it was back then "

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metalrulesall
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i just wanted to know what you people thought of the lyrics them selves

" into the flood again same old trip it was back then "

Posted 4 years ago #
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I like the lyrics especially this line You wanna hold on tight boy's Better run for your life She steal's the spotlight She only play's to win Rapped around your finger Like a second skin Hoping your music is as good as the lyrics...good luck!

Posted 4 years ago #
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thanks RockOfLove.....those are some of my best lryics.....here are some other's

She's got eye's like a ball and chain Gallon tear's they fall like rain One of a kind Like a water fall So crystal clear she's got it all Sticky sweet from head to toe All for one A crystal ball

(Chorus) Star's of night spell out her name Here i go All over again All alone you left me to stand All on my own Queen of the damned

(Verse 2) My body bleed's a love sick pain Still i stand all shackled in chain's Like dust in the wind we blow throught the night It cut's so deep Like the blade of a knife The hand's of time you weather away Tell the early morning break of day

(Chorus) Star's of night spell out her name Here i go All over again All alone you left me to stand All on my own Queen of the damned

i hope you like these as much as you did the last one's...its kinda sad my band rejected me but oh well life goes on

" into the flood again same old trip it was back then "

Posted 4 years ago #
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i like those lyrics...wow.

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Posted 4 years ago #
metalrulesall
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ive got even better one's then those

" into the flood again same old trip it was back then "

Posted 4 years ago #
AniseedRock22350
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yeah...there's always ones that you like more than others...i do that.

"I Want Some Glam RockingZ in My StockingZ!!!"

Posted 4 years ago #
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Great

Posted 3 years ago #
metalrulesall
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guys ur gonna make me fuckin cry...lol......thanx ALOT A 4 UR GOOD COMMENTS...thing is...im just a lonely song right right now... all i need is a band and we'd be the next Ratt....i put my word on that

" into the flood again same old trip it was back then "

Posted 3 years ago #
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wow you're a good writer but the song reminds me of Our love by Krokus a little because of the lyrics " ask me no questions and I tell you no lies" but you're an excellent writer. We should share some ideas some time because I've been writing my own material since I was 14 and I like your way of writing so I would love to share some of my lyrics with ya some time.

it puts the lotion on its skin or else it gets the hose again

Posted 3 years ago #
Jimmy
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Talented little fellow... I like the 'ask me no questions and I tell you no lies' hahaha good point! These are pretty good.

Posted 3 years ago #
metalrulesall
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as 4 u billy acid...gimme some of ur lyrics and ill see what u got....we can trade lyrics and ideas and shit

" into the flood again same old trip it was back then "

Posted 3 years ago #
RebelYellEasyRider
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Put something about ritual slaughter in the song, guaranteed to give controversial views, which can be good for publicity.

Posted 3 years ago #
Rockstarz102
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Dude those are awesome (Literally), I tried writing lyrics myself but that is simply nice, Hopefully your instrumental sections are nice as well.

Keeping the Glam Alive!

Posted 3 years ago #
niki
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I like em as well but I agree with some music that would rock even more. I can kind of get a tune in my head but I have no idea if thats the one that should be there or if its all just made up in my head.

Posted 3 years ago #
metalrulesall
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well ive been wrighting for years but ive never been able to get in a band....and thats fucked because alot of people say i right good and alot of people say i sing really well....but ill keep on wrighting and singing because i love glam and im a trooper and half

" into the flood again same old trip it was back then "

Posted 3 years ago #
ilse
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Metalrulesall that sucks I mean if you obviously have talent you should put it to good use. Maybe you can sell your songs or something.

Posted 3 years ago #
DazzleRoxx
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the verses are a bit short unless your singing em slowly but what you have is good

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Posted 2 years ago #
JohnnieJolt
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Damn I love your lyrics. Actually, I'd steal it if I had a band Anyone else write lyrics?

"And who's to care if I grow my hair to the sky,
I'll take a wish and a prayer, cross my fingers
'cause I always get by."

Posted 2 years ago #
Stokes
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i write but i havent been lately i have a bookfull of unfinished songs

Posted 2 years ago #
KarKing Jack
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I tend to write songs on guitar and bass, and then decide I'll write the lyrics later, and I never do, LOL. But I dont want anyone else to write them for me, because they wont get the feeling of the song right, since they didnt write those parts with me, you know? So they just wind up lyricless for ages.

These are cool lyrics, man.

Posted 2 years ago #
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I got a small piece of text i wrote for my heavy metal band. but the band broke up before we even recorded one song
anyway here are the lyrics, nothing special but curious about what you think of it. (wasn't done yet but stopped writing when band broke up)

Nowhere to run, there's nowhere to hide
i'm gonna find you and force you to fight
you entered the battle, there's no turning back
pick up your weapon and prepare for attack

Chorus:
Metal warriors!
going to battle
Metal warriors!
RULE! WITH! METAL!

it's the power that count's, the power survives
my brothers will hunt you and steal all your lives
I have an offer, that you can't deny
i'm gonna kill you and you're gonna die!

-chorus-

i'm gonna rule you, I'll rule you with pride
my brothers are rising and they will unite
we're gonna torture, we will drive you mad
and wake up the demon's that run through your head

Posted 2 years ago #